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门外汉1982 发表于 25-1-2014 16:09
In recent years, cultural preservation and environment protection attract substantial attention fr ...
In recent years, cultural preservation and environment protection attract substantial attention from the public, more and more people think they are vital to our society. However, people who are in their vocation always find it difficult to be responsible tourists. I completely disagree with this notion and believe that these people should pay serious attention to the environmental problems.
我认为 complete disagree 的观点应该是 impossible to be responsible tourists,但有两个限定条件：culture preservation, and environmental protection.下面两段从这两方面去反驳。
The main reason why I think travelers can be responsible tourists is that they can learn more about the local culture and respect it. Before they go to a new place, they are able to learn about the lifestyle, the beliefs and customs in the tourist resorts on different kinds of media. If visitors have a range of knowledge about different aspects of local culture, they tend to behave in an accepted manner there. In addition, tourists should respect local culture because it is quite necessary to help preserve the culture identity of tourist places.
(这一段观点没错，但是你的论点没啥关系。论点是要强调，其实在旅游过程中是可以做到cultural preservation and environment protection的。)
嗯，好像off-topic或者不是direct answer/argue
你可以这么表达：
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Enjoying local culture and activities is a good way to relax yourself, and local authorities always send booklets or publish in their websites to inform tourists what they can do and what they can not do in plain and multiple language. Tourist can easily follow the rules if they are willing to spend some time to read through. Also, local governments and communities make their best to avoid cultural conflict by choosing and tailoring their performances, presenting their culture in common ways in order to attract more people to visit. Therefore ,it is no doubt to conclude that people can easily to be a responsible tourist if they want to.
-------最后一句话是确保提醒考官，你是很清楚表达，上面的论点就是为了说明旅游者是很容易做到保护当地文化的。
ideas 扣题！
Another reason for being able to responsible visitors is that they can help to protect the local environment. For instance, as travelers, they can choose to travel by public transport such as buses and trains, rather than driving a car, which uses more fossil fuels and creates air pollution. Another good examples are that tourists should put waste such as plastic bottles into rubbish bins and that they can buy less packaged goods when they shop in the high streets of local cities. All these behaviours and activities visitors do are able to contribute to protecting environment.
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第一句another reason就失败了，这里不是问你原因。可以这么说
不是很理解? 能解释一下吗？ 因为这里要强调的是，be able to/can be responsible tourists in terms of environment, 这个是support 我的opinion: it is possible to be responsible tourists.
Perhaps, compared to cultural preservation , it is more important for tourists to protect local environment. Many advice are given by experts and local authorities in terms of how to be environmental responsible. Choosing public transport as possible, collecting waste such as plastic bottles and eating less packaged food are all good practices.
-----这里很显然需要在加一两句话，不然字数不够了。或者在引入一层意思。
Nowadays, many famous tourist sites are facing serious environmental problems due to undue visitors and their inappropriate behavior. In order to relieve the pressure, the administrations impose many restriction on tourists , decreasing travel satisfaction. Thus, to be a environmental responsible tourist , not only preserves environment but also improves the tourist satisfaction.
In conclusion, I totally disagree with the idea that being a responsible visitor is impossible as tourists can take responsibility to help preserve culture and environment.
-----这个结束，等于没说什么。需要用自己的语言总结一下
这个结尾段是restate my opinion,因为是agree and disagree,而你并没有重申自己的观点？
In conclusion, it is not understandable to argue that being a responsible visitor is impossible. Instead, everyone can make their contribution to preserve the local culture and environment.
总体感觉你的作文的确写得好，特别是body paragraphs里面有ideas，比较扣题的ideas. 而且是用自己的语言组织的。  |
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发表于 25-1-2014 00:52:37
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