一雅没烤熟，求助，开始练习全篇写作了，坚持就是胜利

PGKTD

裸考的第一次雅思L5/R4.5/W5.5/S6.5，杯具了，现在复习了剑桥4～7打算二雅去。
通过一个月的复习，发现阅读提高最快，剑7实际模拟下来差不多6.5左右了，听力也有提高，口语没有怎么复习。
现在最担心的是写作，模拟了几篇真题，感觉非常不好，主要问题表现在：
我尝试用中文来写，然后对照中文用英文翻译过去，发现能力完全达不到，很多中文句子自己没办法翻译成地道的英文，结果不论不类了。
看坛子里很多人写的文章，词汇好多我都不认识，再看看自己写的文章，都是非常简单的词汇累计起来的，很不给力啊。
请教下有神马办法能快速提高下作文水平，严重感谢！

PS：本人最不怕的就是和人谈，最怕的就是机器和考卷
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谢谢各位的建议，开始模拟写全篇了，坚持，坚持就是胜利

[ 本帖最后由 PGKTD 于 4-3-2012 14:47 编辑 ]

PGKTD

结构我可以很快弄好，论证/论据也能在1分钟内用中文在大脑里成型，就是没办法用英文表达出来。

FIRE

基本知识的欠缺。

补课

yearshappy

简单的词汇用正确了，比大词汇用错了 分数会高
多些英文阅读，应该会对你说的问题有帮助
试着用阅读过的句子思维去写去构思，避免从中文翻译过来 - 后患无穷，如果恰巧句子符合中文逻辑，却让英语者不知所以然，扣分就更多了

PGKTD

you have recently moved to a different house. write a letter to an English-speaking friend. In your letter: explain why you have moved; describe the new house, invite your friend to come and visit.


Dear Thomas
Time flys, it is two years since we last met in Beijing ,how are things going with you?

I moved to a new house which is close to my parents severial weeks before, as you know my parents like to live in quiet place therefore they select a house in a contryside place and the public transportation is a big problem becasue they can not drive by themselves. After discussing with my wife for a few days, we decide to buy a new house close to my parents sothat we can take care and help them to solve traffic issues.

The new house looks very nice and my wife and i like it very much, it's about 300 square meters with two private gradens, what's more there's a big park with lake which's close to my house, we can go to the park for relax by walk with my parents in weekends.

I will take you to my new house next time when you come to Beijing again, look forward to seeing you soon.

Yours

Peter

PGKTD

Today more people are travelling than ever before. Why is this the case? What are the benefits of travelling for the traveler?
Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Recently, increasingly people like to tralvel than ever before, it is mostly because of economic development and globlization.
(这里忘了还有BENEFIT，审题出错)
The essay will give answers.

Firstly, individual's income increased with the develpment of the economic therefore they have much money which can be allocated to what they want for example travelling to other countries they have never been to for a sight seeing and so on. It was reported by the Chinese Entry-Exit Bureau in 2011, more than five million people went abroad with travelling visa which is about doubel of the number in 2010. People will benefit from oversea travelling a lot.They can realx themselves and improve their knowledge about cultures in diffrent countries.

Secondly,There are more and more business travelling because of globlization,data from thebiggest local travelling agency, Ctrip, shows the amout of sold airtickets was increased 20 percent each in the past 5 years as well as hotel reservation. From my personal experience, I am working in a local representative office which has a headquarter in the United Kindom. I have to travel to London at least three times per year to have meetings with colleagues in head office. I enjoy my tralling very much bucase i can learn a lot from the trip,for example, i can talk with the passengers in the airplane to improve my English and i can make friends with people from different area.

In conclusion, economic development and globlization lead increasingly travelling meanwhile individal can be benefit from it.

[ 本帖最后由 PGKTD 于 4-3-2012 14:51 编辑 ]

PGKTD

Apply for a job
Dear Sir or Madam,

I’m writing to apply for the post of over sea sales manager which you advertised on your website on Friday, October,12

I’m confident my background and experience fit this job well. I was graduated from Tsinghua University in 2001 major in heating and dynamic engineering and began my career in **company Shanghai office as a sales engineer. In 2006, I was promoted to  project manager responsible for  the projects in east of China. And now I’m seeking for a chance to work overseas  that I can develop my potential further.

I would like to choose a company located in Paris with good reputation or small private companies which allow me to enjoy a larger space of promotion .My wife will be relocated to Paris next year therefore i would like to seek a new job in the same city to stay with her.

Enclosed please find my resume that outlines in detail my qualifications and experiences as well as an letter of recommendation from my former employer.

Please give me a feedback at your earliest convenience if my qualifications meet your requirements.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.

Yours sincerely,

cienanos2

Dear Thomas
Time flys, it is two years since we last met in Beijing ,how are things going with you?
Dear Thomas,
How are you?
It has been two years since we met each other last year in Beijing. How time flies!

I moved to a new house which is close to my parents severial weeks before, as you know my parents like to live in quiet place therefore they select a house in a contryside place and the public transportation is a big problem becasue they can not drive by themselves. After discussing with my wife for a few days, we decide to buy a new house close to my parents sothat we can take care and help them to solve traffic issues.
I have moved to a new house which is close to my parents' place several weeks ago. As my parents prefer a tranquil rural area to a crowded urban area, they have been lived in suburb for years. But in the meantime, they have been conflicted with traffic issues due to the lack of public transportation in the local area and their lack of driving skills. After discussing with my wife, I decided to perform this relocation in order to look after my parents.

The new house looks very nice and my wife and i like it very much, it's about 300 square meters with two private gradens, what's more there's a big park with lake which's close to my house, we can go to the park for relax by walk with my parents in weekends.
Fortunately, the new house is nice and cozy therefore we adore it. Firstly, this house is spacious with a 300-square-meter area. Secondly, it affords two private gardens. Moreover, there is a large park with a tranquil and serene lake in the neighborhood. Hence, I can go there for relaxation and working out by jogging with my parents and wife in each weekend.

I will take you to my new house next time when you come to Beijing again, look forward to seeing you soon.
I would like to invite you to my beautiful new house when you visit Beijing again in the near future.
Look forwards to meeting with you soon!

Yours

Peter
Best regards,

Yours sincerely,

Peter

[ 本帖最后由 cienanos2 于 5-3-2012 02:23 编辑 ]

cienanos2

Apply for a job
Dear Sir or Madam,
To whom may concern,

I’m writing to apply for the post of over sea sales manager which you advertised on your website on Friday, October,12
I am applying for the position of overseas sales manager listed on the website of your business on October 12nd, 2012.

I’m confident my background and experience fit this job well. I was graduated from Tsinghua University in 2001 major in heating and dynamic engineering and began my career in **company Shanghai office as a sales engineer. In 2006, I was promoted to  project manager responsible for  the projects in east of China. And now I’m seeking for a chance to work overseas  that I can develop my potential further.
I am confident that my professional qualifications and working experience  can fulfill the job requirement.
I graduated for Tsinghua University in 2001 with a bachelor degree of Heating and Dynamic Engineering. After that, I have been worked in **company, Shanghai Branch until now. In 2006, I was promoted to be a Project Manager who is responsible for all projects in the east of China.
In order to further explore my potential, now I decide to seek new opportunities to work overseas.  

I would like to choose a company located in Paris with good reputation or small private companies which allow me to enjoy a larger space of promotion .My wife will be relocated to Paris next year therefore i would like to seek a new job in the same city to stay with her.
I would like to work in a small business with good reputation located in Paris which can afford me with adequate promotion opportunities. The reason for this is that my wife will relocate herself to Paris next year and I would like to work and live in the same city with her.

Enclosed please find my resume that outlines in detail my qualifications and experiences as well as an letter of recommendation from my former employer.
Please check my resume and a recommendation letter in the attachment.

Please give me a feedback at your earliest convenience if my qualifications meet your requirements.
I look forward to hearing from you soon.
It will be deeply appreciated if you can reply me at your earliest convenience.

Yours sincerely,

PGKTD

谢谢楼上的兄弟...看你烤鸭进步速度惊人，膜拜一下

[ 本帖最后由 PGKTD 于 5-3-2012 15:05 编辑 ]

bsherry

单纯的应付烤鸭，推荐楼主一本很好的书---《慎小嶷十天突破写作》，我用2个月复习，每天一遍作文，一次通过，写作6分。60天的强化练习，对我的语句结构性也有很大的锻炼，自然而然的也就说出来了，说5.5（我是副申，目标也就这么大），这是我最大的感触。 我毕业多年不说英语，4级2次不过，水平可想而知。老公的写作资料也是非此书不二选，那是逢人必荐。。遇到一本好的学习资料能事半功倍哦 ，希望楼主能顺利拿下二鸭！！

asxdcfv

我个人觉得中文组材，翻译过来，也是不错的方法，翻译有多种，不要局限必须和中文一样。