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Space travel has been possible for some time and some people think the space tourism could be developed in the future. To what extent do you think it’s positive or negative development?



In the context of new development in technology, it is believed that space tourism could be achieved in the future. In this essay, the development of space travel will be discussed. It argues that the development is significantly positive in a few ways.

First of all, developing space tourism would require many industries, such as computing, information technology, etc., work together. As a result of that, a considerable number of job would be created, which would increase the employment rate. An example of how outer space projects create job positions is the way NASA works. To keep NASA working, a large number of experts from Medicine, Biology, Physic and so on, work as a team. NASA is creating the job position for those experts.

Also, exploring the unknown is a characteristic of human nature. However, only a select group of individuals have the chance to explore outer space right now. If space tourism can be opened to the public, the curiosity of ordinary people would be satisfied.

Some people may have the concern that developing space tourism might be a waste of money. It is true that a considerable amount of money would be spent, but if space tourism is achieved, many people would spend a lot on such travel. Therefore, instead of wasting money, much income can be made by the development of tourism.

In conclusion, space tourism is a positive development that not only can improve the employment opportunities of may industries, but also can satisfy people’s curiosity of people.

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发表于 30-8-2013 21:48:39 | 只看该作者
学习下。。

In this essay, the development of space travel will be discussed. It argues that the development is significantly positive in a few ways.
空间旅游的发展将在文章中进行讨论。它认为在近几年这个发展具有显著的积极作用。感觉不连贯啊?

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 楼主| 发表于 3-9-2013 11:35:38 | 只看该作者
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发表于 3-9-2013 13:00:35 | 只看该作者
好几个语法错误, 比如单数复数用的不对,名词动词用的不对. 楼主喜欢这个considerable词吗?第二个可以换个词表达同样的意思.
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