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作者: fredliu 时间: 14-9-2008 04:14
标题: 您要学雅思作文吗？
本人长期为广州多家一线雅思、托福培训中心做写作教师，擅长雅思和新托福写作。如果论坛上有TX需要批改雅思/新托福作文，了解当前雅思/新托福考试动态，或者在广州的TX需要VIP面授课程，我会尽力帮你克服考试难关！

短消息或 QQ:55669717

另外，本人目前也在办理澳洲移民，并希望达悉尼后能继续从事雅思培训工作

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作者: lavahx 时间: 14-9-2008 05:09
收费不？？

作者: woody81 时间: 14-9-2008 14:23
请楼主转发AD版面，1小时后删帖。

作者: fredliu 时间: 14-9-2008 17:23
每天可以免费改一篇，供大家参考。有兴趣的TX可以在回复贴上提交作文。到底能不能学到东西，试一试就知道

作者: woody81 时间: 14-9-2008 18:14
标题: pls show your literary talent
当我进SAM家的时候，他正坐在地上玩他前面的一堆玩具。“SAM，你好！”我说“你好VIVIAN”他双手还玩着一辆玩具车抬头说。　我在他的身边坐下来，问他：“你在玩什么”他右手举起他的车说“这是我的车”它会跳舞。然后他双手把车翻过来，用右手按了一个小开关，再把它放在了地板上，小车开的很快，还会转弯，SAM骄傲的说，看到了吧，它跳舞的。SAM用右手抓了抓头，然后爬过去又把小车用右手抓了回来。然后递给我说“你会玩吗？”我说我可以试试，他凑过来替我把开关打开，然后认真的说，是这样的。然后他退回去用手指着地板说，把它放下去。我放下去，车开走了，他开心的笑，双手支起身子去追车了。

When I SAM into the home, he is sitting on the ground in front of him on a pile of toys. "SAM, hello!" I said, "Hello VIVIAN" he hands a toy car Wan Zhao also said the rise. I sit down to his side, asked him: "What you are playing," he raised his right hand to say "This is my car," it will dance. Then he hands the car turned over, andThe right hand by a small switch, then it on the floor, opened the car quickly, but also turn, SAM proud of that and see it, it's dance. SAM Zhua Liaozhua head with his right hand, and then climb again over the past car with his right hand grasping the back. And then handed it to me that "you will play?» "I said I can try, I Couguo functions of the switch to open, and then seriously, is this. He then returned to the floor with their hands pointed at that, to put it aside. I lay down to, the car gone, his happy smile, hands-Quzhui from the body of the car.

作者: fredliu 时间: 14-9-2008 18:20
woody, what do you want me to do? I am so confused with "pls show your literary talent"

. there are so many errors in it, u want me to correct them?

[ 本帖最后由 fredliu 于 14-9-2008 17:23 编辑 ]

作者: woody81 时间: 14-9-2008 18:46

just kidding！what about this part？

SAM used right hand to give a scrach on his head. Then he got over to carrid the toy by his right hand."Would you play?"he passed the toy.I said I would like to try.He closed to me ang switched it on."Like that!"He speaking seriously.Then he moved back and pointed to the floor,said"put it down".I put the car down then it was running,He smiled and looked happy,standing up to catch the car。

作者: fredliu 时间: 14-9-2008 19:06
woody, I suggest you post an IELTS essay as a trial, thank you.

Sam scrathed his head with his right hand. Then he got over to carry a toy car in his right hand. "Would you play?" He passed the toy to me. I said I would like to try. He approached me and switched it on. "Like that!" He spoke seriously. Then he moved back and pointed to the floor, saying "Put it down." I put down the car , then it began to run. He smiled and stood up to catch it.

[ 本帖最后由 fredliu 于 14-9-2008 18:08 编辑 ]

作者: woody81 时间: 14-9-2008 19:17
I saw you did it well! Thanks for sharing

作者: fredliu 时间: 15-9-2008 02:43
Thank you too! I just hope I can find some part time job here to help those being tortured by IELTS!

作者: bigrixin 时间: 15-9-2008 18:43
您好，老师，

http://www.freeoz.org/forum/thread-795651-1-1.html

这里写作必备35句，感觉挺好，有很多句型可以用，但是记忆比较困难，能否根据这35句的句型，总结一篇或两篇短文，这样有助于记忆。。。

我只是将内容相同的罗列到一起，但是还不是一篇完整的文章，若可能的话，请帮忙，我想即使作为您的教案也是可以的。谢谢

顺祝老师早日移民成功！！

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写作必备35句 Plus

Nothing is more important than to receive education. 没有比接受教育更重要的事。

There is no one but longs to go to college. 没有人不渴望上大学。

It is conceivable that knowledge plays an important role in our life. 可想而知，知识在我们的一生中扮演一个重要的角色。

On no account can we ignore the value of knowledge. 我们绝对不能忽略知识的价值。

So precious is time that we can't afford to waste it. 时间是如此珍贵，我们经不起浪费它。

The harder you work, the more progress you make. 你愈努力，你愈进步。

The more books we read, the more learned we become. 我们书读愈多，我们愈有学问。

We should bring home to people the value of working hard. 我们应该让人们明白努力的价值。

Helen is the most beautiful girl that I have ever seen.    海伦是我所看过最美丽的女孩。

Since she went to senior high school, she has worked very hard. 自从她上高中，她一直很用功。

Reading does good to our mind. 读书对心灵有益。

Overwork does harm to health. 工作过度对健康有害。

We should get into the habit of keeping good hours. 我们应该养成早睡早起的习惯。

We cannot emphasize the importance of protecting our eyes too much.  我们再怎么强调保护眼睛的重要性也不为过。

Listening to music enable us to feel relaxed. 听音乐使我们能够感觉轻松。

By taking exercise, we can always stay healthy. 借着做运动，我们能够始终保持健康。

Taking exercise is closely related to health. 做运动与健康息息相关。

For the past two years, I have been busy preparing for the examination.  过去两年来，我一直忙着准备考试。

Since the examination is around the corner, I am compelled to give up doing sports.
既然考试迫在眉睫，我不得不放弃做运动。

Summer is sultry. That is the reason why I don't like it. 夏天很燠热。那就是我不喜欢它的原因。

Mr. Chang is the kindest teacher that I have ever had. 张老师是我曾经遇到最仁慈的教师。

Thanks to his encouragement, I finally realized my dream. 因为他的鼓励，我终于实现我的梦想。

It pays to help others. 帮助别人是值得的。

What an important thing it is to keep our promise!    How important a thing it is to keep our promise!
遵守诺言是多么重要的事！

There is no doubt that our educational system leaves something to be desired.  毫无疑问的我们的教育制度令人不满意。

The condition of our traffic leaves much to be desired. 我们的交通状况令人不满意。

It is time the authorities concerned took proper steps to solve the traffic problems.
该是有关当局采取适当的措施来解决交通问题的时候了。

Those who violate traffic regulations should be punished. 违反交通规定的人应该受处罚。

Rich as our country is, the qualities of our living are by no means satisfactory.
虽然我们的国家富有，我们的生活品质绝对令人不满意。

There is no denying that the qualities of our living have gone from bad to worse.
不可否认的，我们的生活品质已经每况愈下。

It is universally acknowledged that trees are indispensable to us.  全世界都知道树木对我们是不可或缺的。

The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can provide us with fresh air./ The reason why we have to grow trees is that they can supply fresh air for us. 我们必须种树的原因是它们能供应我们新鲜的空气。

Pollution poses a great threat to our existence. 污染对我们的生存造成一大威胁。

Smoking has a great influence on our health.    抽烟对我们的健康有很大的影响。

We should spare no effort to beautify our environment. 我们应该不遗余力的美化我们的环境。

An advantage of using the solar energy is that it won't create (produce) any pollution.
使用太阳能的优点是它不会制造任何污染。

The progress of thee society is based on harmony. 社会的进步是以和谐为基础的。

We should do our utmost to achieve our goal in life. 我们应尽全力去达成我们的人生目标。

[ 本帖最后由 bigrixin 于 15-9-2008 17:45 编辑 ]

作者: fredliu 时间: 15-9-2008 22:01
这些句子作为句型拓展来说还是很不错的

，谢谢bigrixin

作者: fredliu 时间: 18-9-2008 13:31
打算免费帮TX们修改一些作文，一周两到三篇，请大家积极发贴.

作者: xiaofangfang 时间: 19-9-2008 16:06
今天刚刚参加了第二次烤鸭，看来又要考一次了，其他都过6了，就是写作没达到；写作文一直是我心中的痛啊，不管是中文还是英文；

作者: fredliu 时间: 19-9-2008 23:34
标题: 回复 #14 xiaofangfang 的帖子
那就把你上次考试时写的大作在这里发表一下吧，我看看能帮你什么

作者: 8戒 时间: 20-9-2008 00:35
偶没接受过高等教育，没上过雅思，以前没写过英文短文，现在在澳洲老师几乎每周都让写这些东西，可是拿回来一看，老师改的地方实在是多啊，而且发现自己的思维方式还是有别与他们。不知道老师有什么好的建议能够提高一下写作的么？

作者: fredliu 时间: 20-9-2008 01:38
标题: 回复 #16 justin9302 的帖子
没看到你的作文，怎么建议呀？

作者: 8戒 时间: 20-9-2008 09:33
嗯，写作入门方法有不？哎，只怕写出来的东西被大家笑掉大牙啊

作者: fredliu 时间: 20-9-2008 16:55
there is nothing called writing techniques without writing practice. so don't be afraid, just do it. and believe me, nobody is meant to laugh at anyone else.

作者: woody81 时间: 20-9-2008 22:23
somebody write something!

作者: 8戒 时间: 22-9-2008 21:49
标题: this is my today's homework
this is my today's homework,writing
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作者: fredliu 时间: 22-9-2008 22:54
justin, is that your homework?

Your "New-Concept-English" style humor is very impressive!

作者: fredliu 时间: 22-9-2008 22:57
Come on, if no one actually needs any hlep, I will ask the web-master to dump the post

作者: fredliu 时间: 22-9-2008 23:00
Here is the task 2 question for September 6th, can anyone try it?

Once children start school, the teachers have more influence in their intellectual and social development than parents. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

作者: 8戒 时间: 22-9-2008 23:25
i am do my homework now, and i dont' know it's come from NCE.

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作者: lavahx 时间: 22-9-2008 23:32
俺练习时写的，用了模板

Giving detailed descriptions of crime by newspaper and television, someone says it could make bad consequence; this kind of media should be restricted. To what extant do you agree or disagree?

In this day and age, the print media, newspaper and magazines, and the electronic media, television or radio, are awash in particular news coverage of criminal acts in our daily life. But in the meantime, controversy has arisen over whether the detailed information about crime should be in public. Some individuals declare that those descriptions will help us know criminal acts well while many others cast serious doubts on the proponents' option and refute that it will lead bad consequence. Speaking for myself, I tend to take sides with the latter view.

Obviously, detailed reports of crimes may carry great risks. In the first place, those who have criminal tendency will easily learn from criminal processes, plans and tools and as detailed reports to avoid capturing by polices. For instance, a TV program shows news about polices arrested two thieves when they tried to steal goods and money in a supermarket. The coverage describes a lot of details about time schedule of the supermarket and the location of the monitors and the process indicated polices how to capture thieves. Therefore, offenders easily commit a crime through watching them as a reference. Furthermore, to victims detailed descriptions of criminal acts are inhumane and harm them again. Therefore, for protecting victims who have suffered greatly from these crimes, banning detailed reports of criminal acts in all kinds of media is necessary.

On the other hand, crime reports may bring some benefits. To start with, a notice from media about criminal acts is an alarm to people in the city and keeps them pay attention to their belongings and safe. A good case in point is people will buy some facilities like electric alarms and video monitors for enhancing house security after watching local news about stealing and avoid going to some places where often someone was robbed reported by newspaper. Even so, detailed report of crimes makes the above methods useless. Therefore, the press should avoid publishing too many detailed descriptions of criminal acts.

Based on all the arguments offered above, I would contend that the media should inform the public about criminal acts. Despite that, the drawbacks created by detailed reports of crimes far outweigh the advantages. As a consequence, I am convinced that to avoid detailed descriptions of crimes is a duty of the media.
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作者: 8戒 时间: 22-9-2008 23:36
The birthday present

Rita's mother's birthday would come soon. She want give a big surprise to her mother.So she decided to buy a special gift for her mother. She goes to a pets shop and find a bird, it not only can say different languages but also singing songs. It was so expersive, but she still brought it and delivered it to her mother.

When on her mother's birthday, she rang her mother, asked her mother "Happy birthday, Do you like my present?" Her mother said"Thank you darling, it's very delicious" Rita was so sad, but she told her mother, "I feel so glad, you like it!"

作者: ritaclin 时间: 22-9-2008 23:48
The birthday present

Rita's mother's birthday is coming. She wants to give her mother a big surprise, so she decides to buy a special gift for her. She goes to a pet shop and finds a bird, which can not only speak different languages but also sing songs. It is quite expersive, but she still buys it and delivers it to her mother.

On her mother's birthday, Rita rings her mother and says "Happy birthday, Do you like my present?" Her mother says "Thank you darling, it's very delicious" Rita is sad, but she tells her mother, "I feel so glad that you like it!"

作者: 8戒 时间: 22-9-2008 23:52
ah, THANKS for you stroy, I am feel so sad for you pet.

作者: 8戒 时间: 23-9-2008 00:03
YOU will be~!

作者: fredliu 时间: 23-9-2008 00:13

原帖由 lavahx 于 22-9-2008 22:32 发表

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俺练习时写的，用了模板

Giving detailed descriptions of crime by newspaper and television, someone says it could make bad consequence; this kind of media should be restricted. To what extant do you ...

老兄也忒能干了，388字！快写成小说发表了

用了多少时间呀？考试时你最多能写多少字？

作者: fredliu 时间: 23-9-2008 00:58

原帖由 lavahx 于 22-9-2008 22:32 发表

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俺练习时写的，用了模板

Giving detailed descriptions of crime by newspaper and television, someone says it could make bad consequence; this kind of media should be restricted. To what extant do you ...

作文评分常用四个指标：1.task response; 2. cohesion and coherence; 3. lexical resources; 4. grammatical precision and range.
你这篇文章得基本评分如下：
1 问题答复：6
2 逻辑与连贯：6
3 词汇运用：5
4 语法和句式：5
综合：5.5
你得这篇作文模板运用得不错，开头尤其好。但是在论点展开得过程中暴露了词汇运用和语法、句式等基本功方面的很多问题。尤其是汉语式的句子比较多，会影响理解。所以，观点分遭到语言分的拖累，还是有点难达到6分。

作者: fredliu 时间: 16-10-2008 02:02
社会类话题，尤其是犯罪话题，是雅思大作文的一个难点。很多刚开始接触雅思的人都对这些话题没有足够的观点，更谈不上论据的充分论证。
请大家思考以下这个话题，你有什么相关的观点和论据吗？
2) 2008/01/12的大作文考题：
Some people hold the view that the best way of reducing crimes is to prolong the crime sentence. Others, however, think that there are better alternatives to reduce the crime rate. Discuss both sides and state your own opinion.

作者: fredliu 时间: 16-10-2008 22:57

原帖由 fredliu 于 16-10-2008 02:02 发表

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社会类话题，尤其是犯罪话题，是雅思大作文的一个难点。很多刚开始接触雅思的人都对这些话题没有足够的观点，更谈不上论据的充分论证。
请大家思考以下这个话题，你有什么相关的观点和论据吗？
2) 2008/01/12的大作 ...

以下是我对这个题目的答复，请各位参考。看过之后请多提宝贵意见！

The rise of crime rate often goes with the rapid development of economy, which is especially true in today’s China. In combating crimes, people are thinking of different ways of solution, one of which is to prolong the penalty terms.

Proponents of this idea stress that increased penalty terms against crimes will effectively deter potential criminals, who would think twice or change their mind before any bold action if they consider the prolonged imprisonment might be inflicted on them. A recent national crime survey has revealed that about 70% of police officers complain that the “cost” for committing crimes is at a historically low level and that this may in some sense “encourage” bold and vicious actions.

However, many criminologists do not share this theory, criticizing this idea as “cowards’ solution”, and pointing out that it will threaten judicial fairness as well as arouse hatred in criminals so as to deteriorate the effects of crime sentences. They insist that more rational solutions be taken instead. Firstly, more efforts shall be made to publicize the present laws, so that every citizen is better aware of the consequences of breaking laws; secondly, more civil organizations can be set up to supervise and help investigate into crimes; thirdly, imprisoned criminals shall receive better education in practical skills with which they can make a decent living without committing crimes when they return home.

In my opinion, prolonging crime sentence is no sensible solution against the crime rate. Only by joining the efforts of the police and the society, establishing a fair and more harmonious social environment, can we effectively ensure our own security.

作者: yohbros 时间: 27-10-2008 15:41
标题: 回复 #34 fredliu 的帖子
刘老师，上面的关于犯罪的文章的题目这样翻译可以吗？：
很多人认减少犯罪发生的最好途径就是延长判刑时间，但另外一些人认为减少犯罪率是一个更好的选择”，讨论两方面并亮出你的观点。

作者: fredliu 时间: 27-10-2008 17:53
标题: 回复 #35 yohbros 的帖子
后半句翻译有问题。应该是“一些人认减少犯罪发生的最好途径就是延长刑期，但另外一些人认为有其他更好的选择”；评论这两种看法并指出你的看法。”

作者: xiaofangfang 时间: 31-10-2008 17:32

原帖由 fredliu 于 16-10-2008 02:02 发表

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社会类话题，尤其是犯罪话题，是雅思大作文的一个难点。很多刚开始接触雅思的人都对这些话题没有足够的观点，更谈不上论据的充分论证。
请大家思考以下这个话题，你有什么相关的观点和论据吗？
2) 2008/01/12的大作 ...

现在正在上培训班，听了两次写作课，现在只能写大纲，这么写不知道可以不：
开始第一段：现在犯罪率越来越高，有些人认为降低犯罪率最好的办法是延长刑期，我认为还有一些更好的方法；
接下来三段，写三个方法：犯罪与社会发展，学习教育，家庭教育并举行例子来支持，通过这样可以大大减少犯罪
最后一段总结：延长刑期并不是最好的办法，还有其他方法可以达到更好的效果

感觉自己写的都是废话，希望过段时间就可以写出完整的task 2；

作者: fredliu 时间: 31-10-2008 22:31
楼上的，你的大纲有偏题之嫌。题目很明确，是让你讨论双方的观点（即各自的道理），然后在表达自己的看法。你则是强调一面。

必须先分析：赞成延长刑期的人，有哪些道理；然后是反对者有哪些道理；最后在再得出自己的看法或solutions才是正道。注意“Discuss both sides and state your own opinion.” 这一要求所含有的特定任务。

再者，第三段“犯罪与社会发展”怎么能说是一个更好的解决办法呢？看不出是个solution啊。

这个话题，说起来难，写起来更难。不落实到纸上，还是不知道能写成什么效果。

作者: 采薇子 时间: 20-11-2008 17:09
标题: 回复 #38 fredliu 的帖子
多谢LZ老师的这些指点！

我都好久没写过作文啦……

作者: fredliu 时间: 15-12-2008 15:34
2008/01/26以下这个教育类的题目也不好写，看看你有什么办法应付它？

Unemployment rate becomes increasingly high in many countries. Some people think that only primary schooling should be offered to the public and there is no point in offering secondary education to those who have no hope of finding a job. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

列出你的观点和论据即可。

作者: fredliu 时间: 15-12-2008 15:38
还有这一篇：
How important for individuals and countries think about future, rather than focusing on present?

作者: fredliu 时间: 16-12-2008 13:34
“未来与现在”这一篇一定要用实际的例子来做论据，否则太抽象的论据是很难服人的。这一篇我写得比较有心得:
As the world is developing at an unprecedented rate today, it is increasingly important for individuals and countries to take realistic steps in the present as well as set feasible goals for the future. In my opinion, we should attach equal significance to the present and future.

We have learned enough from experience that if we want to accomplish anything, we must lay a solid foundation now. A high school graduates who aims at a top university has to make great effort to improve his academic standard to a qualified level in order to win admission of his ideal university. Similarly, a country must take proper, practical measures to better its internal industrial and economic conditions so as to create a prosperous environment, attract domestic and foreign investment, and ensure sustained healthy growth of its economy.

On the other hand, making a sensible plan for future and constantly adjust the present actions against this plan is essential to guarantee the final success. Unlike other animals, men are future-oriented beings, who may easily get lost without a clearly-set goal in their mind. Millions of people regret that they have not achieved success simply because they never knew where they should have gone when they were young. The same is true with countries. For instance, a blind imitation of international building styles and a lack of long-term city planning to preserve their characteristic architectures have eventually taken their tolls in many towns in China, leaving the cities as ugly hybrids of many meaningless, contradictory styles.

It is self-evident from the above analysis that to maintain desirable and sustainable development, we must wisely treat the present and future; as negligence of either aspect may lead to regrettable failures of even irreparable disasters.

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作者: 歪拉 时间: 23-12-2008 02:56
标题: 回复 #40 fredliu 的帖子
no point in 是什么意思啊? 是没必要的意思吗?

作者: fredliu 时间: 30-12-2008 21:23

原帖由歪拉于 23-12-2008 02:56 发表

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no point in 是什么意思啊? 是没必要的意思吗?

Hello, "no point in..." means "no reason in..."

作者: 小波 时间: 4-1-2009 15:21

刚发现这个帖子
希望楼主能继续帮助大家

作者: sdkongkong 时间: 5-1-2009 13:31
这个月就要考试了，楼主老师帮我提提意见，非常感谢热心的楼主。
2) 2008/01/12的大作文考题：
Some people hold the view that the best way of reducing crimes is to prolong the crime sentence. Others, however, think that there are better alternatives to reduce the crime rate. Discuss both sides and state your own opinion.

There have been two views about reducing crimes in modern times. One views states that the crime sentence can reduce crimes and it should be prolonged.Another view believes there are better methods , such as education ,skill training. I prefer the second view to the first one.

Letting  criminals know the world more can reduce the the crime rate. There is an saying : More schools ,less prisons . I think good education to criminals can change their mind before the crimes. And also , many criminals do the crime because their poverty .Give them a skill to earn their life could stop they crime again.

Admittedly , prolonging sentence could reduce crimes temporarily .The reason for that is severe  punish make the individual felling scared. Obviously , everyone would think about the result of the crime .But after a long thinking about and getting over the scare , they still choose the bad ideas. For instance , if they are lack of food and starving  , nothing is more important than life.

In conclusion , prolonging sentence may reduce a little crime race , but it is not the best way. I do believe  material wealth and spirit wealth  , such as education and skill earning money are the better ways  to solve the crimes.

[ 本帖最后由 sdkongkong 于 5-1-2009 13:33 编辑 ]

作者: fredliu 时间: 6-1-2009 02:35
LS你好！我给你的作文评分情况如下：

问题答复：5；逻辑与连贯：5；词汇：5；语法和句式：6；综合：5分。
突出的问题是论据比较单薄，难以对前两个论点进行有效论证。
推荐给你以下论据：

第一段第二句后：…One states that more severe punishment such as prolonging sentecces can effectively reduce crimes. The other view is that crime rate can only be lowered through better education and skill training for criminals.

第二段论据部分：Equipped with broadened mind and practical vocational skills, imprisoned criminals will stand a better chance to make a living with their own hands when sentece terms are over. In this sense, education and skill training means a new futer set on an upright course of life.

第三段论据部分：More severe punishment may work to deter potential criminals for a short period… But in the long run, it is more likely to undermine the foundation of law and justice. Moreover,increased sentece terms will result in a growing number of prisoners which in turn wastes valuable resources and brings more pressure to the police system.

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作者: sdkongkong 时间: 7-1-2009 14:28
多谢楼主的批改，词汇方面我确实好像只会用些简单点的。我再仔细揣摩揣摩。

作者: quakekkk 时间: 15-1-2009 01:20
今天第一天练作文，随便拿了个2006年的题目，没打算计时，结果用了1h40min（汗），先不管这些了，老师帮忙看看吧，多谢！
注：没查字典，字数为写完后word统计。
2006-01-21
TASK 1 - YOUR FRIENDS FROM ENGLISH-SPOKEN COUNTRY WILL VISIT YOUR COUNTRY AND ASK YOU ADVICES。WRITE A LETTER：
1。INVITE TO SAY WITH YOU
2。SUGGEST SOME PLACES TO VISIT
3。SOME ADVISES
TASK 2
SOME PEOPLE THINK THAT SPEND A LOT OF MONEY HOLDING WEDDING PARTIES， BIRTHDAY PARTIES ARE A WASTE OF MONEY。 OTHERS BELIEVE THEY ARE IMPORTANT TO THE INDIVIDUALS AND SOCETY。
DISCUSS THE BOTH VIEWS AND GIVE YOUR OWN OPINIONS。

task1

203 words)
Dear XXX,

I'm very happy hearing you will visit my country soon. I hope you can come to Hangzhou, the city i live in, if your timetable is not much tight and I would be great appriciated being a guide for you.

There are a host of famous attractive places worth you visit in China. Since I don't know what kind of attraction you like most, I just recommender some time-honored places to you. In my opinion, Beijing is famous for its triditional royal buildings such as Gugong, while Lijiang in Yunnan province and Jiuzaigou in Sicuan province are the most beautiful landscape places if you prefer seeing the nature. I'd like to enjoy the charming sightseeing with you on a boat floating on the West Lake if you come here.

However, I have some advices for you during your travel. First of all, you'd better buy a map in order to avoid being lost yourself. Secondly, you should remember some emergency telphone numbers in case of some unexpected situations. For instance, 110 is police service, 120 is hospital service and 119 is fire service.

I look forward to meeting you. Welcome to China and wish you enjoy your tour.

Yours sincerely,

XXX

task2

330 words)
In the comtemporary society, more and more money is spended on wedding parties and birthday parties. Some people holding opposit view strongly against with them which are unacceptable activities of wasting money, while many others argue that these luxious activies play essencial roles in individuals life and society. From my perspect, I stand on the former side without any hesitation.

The reasons for this issue are multiple. Firstly, wedding parties are only celebrations to show relatives and friends "we have been married" and receive good wishes from them. As the same meaning, birthday parites are held only to mark one's age. Furthermore, to an individual, birthday is less important than wedding because one has his birthday every year as one has only 1 wedding in his or her life generally. Secondly, lots of money spended on these parties is not earned by themselves. For example, the money may mainly be given by their parents even entirely. Nevertheless, they do not know how much effort their parents do as well as how long their parents save the amount of money. Thirdly, they are vulnerable being victims of show-off and peer pressure. As a matter of fact, many of them are not rich enough to hold such kind of parties, however, they are afraid of laughed by others. Finally, these activities cause social problems such as culture deterirating anddiscriminating the poors consequently.

Admittedly, a wedding party is definitely important for a person because it may encourage one to act as a better man with more sense of responsibility. And a birthday party is also necessary for a child thereby making many friends. However, on one archives success by gorgeous parties.

To conclude, I do not against with holding wedding parties and birthday parties if they are held moderately, according one's own finacial condition. Holding such parties overly should be condamned rather than condoned. I am convinced that we should hold these parties more simplely and more siginificantly instead of spending more money.

作者: sdkongkong 时间: 4-2-2009 18:45
呵呵，楼主很准哎，我果然考了5分。

作者: jessi 时间: 5-2-2009 19:04
I need your helps........thanks in advance......but now a days, i cant complete a ielts wrinting even....
but LZ you are really warmhearted.

By the way, do you have any valuable reference book for preparing the ielts wrinting?
dont hesitate to show me pls.......

作者: 唯有KH 时间: 9-2-2009 14:23
嘿嘿麻烦啦

Brain drain is a delicate with which this country is confronted. On the one hand, more and more college students who are excellent prefer choosing to study abroad. However, after several years, these students don’t tend to come back to homeland. On the other hand, some people prefer spending such much money to work abroad and get a developed country’s nationality.
What are the causes of brain drain? For one thing, there is a little of respect for brain in this society. And the higher education students get no fame and fortune which they should get. For another, supplying a better atmosphere of studying at abroad, brain can gain more academic achievements. Finally, lack of money to research work in this countries, the brain have to study abroad. For instance, there is a little money for institutes in this countries.
To sum up, firstly, we should give more respect for brain. Secondly, this government had better to supply a better atmosphere of studying for brain. Consequently, I’m confindent that a bright future for the development of this brain in this countries.

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