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Some people believe that the best way to improve the general well-being of schoolchildren is to make physical education compulsory in all schools. Others, however, think that this would have little effect on overall health and that other measures are needed.
Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.
It is a frequent topic of discussion on how to improve the overall well-being of schoolchildren. Some people suggest that compulsory physical education is the best approach, while others think there could be better ways to achieve that. In this essay I will analyze both arguments and aim to find out a comprehensive solution to this issue.
It is true that a compulsory physical education at school could benefit students in a number of ways. Apparently more physical exercise means better physical fitness, and this is particularly important considering the worrying fact that a growing number of children spend much of their spare time on watching TV and playing computer games. Furthermore, sports activities contribute to the development of social and teamwork skills. For example, playing football in a team allows students to learn how to communicate with each other and work together in order to win a game.
That is not to say that physical education alone could improve the overall well-being of the students, there are other equally important measures that help to fulfill the purpose. Firstly, students should be encouraged to join more after-school activities, such as volunteer work and public events. An active engagement in the surrounding communities is beneficial for young people to cultivate a strong sense of responsibility towards society and a spirit of caring to the people in need. Secondly, to better prepare schoolchildren for their future career, the curriculum might be adjusted regularly to be in alignment with the fast changing requirements of the highly competitive job market.
In my opinion, the well-being of a student refers to a well-rounded development on many aspects of human qualities, including intellectual, emotional, social as well as physical. Therefore, a concerted and comprehensive approach is preferred to tackle this issue, rather than focusing on physical education alone.
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发表于 29-10-2014 16:19:46
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