shanshan作者: qiuxan 时间: 18-11-2013 00:15
the more you earn, the more you need。。。 这个太口语，真正考试你敢写考官就敢给你5.5～并且这个理由太主观，赚大钱却很节约的也大有人在～though the juvenile have better physical health than before, the number of individuals who have mental illness surges. 这一句是又改写了一遍题目完全无用呀～而且the number of individuals who have mental illness surges是“结果”而不是“原因”你中心句却说“There are several reasons”，～You are lying to your readers(在鬼佬看来是很严重的错误)～还有就是 小姨的模版：there are xxx reasons。。。1xxx2xxx3xxx 已经被用烂了～作者: jojopig2002 时间: 18-11-2013 00:21 本帖最后由 jojopig2002 于 18-11-2013 00:30 编辑