Know more about foreigner, feel more plain about foreigner

kingsking

when i met the first foreigner in 1999 in China, (he is a university student, i think)
i feel the foreigner is always clever and polite. i think they know the world-class knowledge and are very gentle, and then I have much things to learn from them.

And when i grow more old, and have met many foreigners such as the tourists and some foreign workers,
i feel they are odinary man too.
Some of them are not polite, not clever and not gentle.

I think i should have a fairer evaluation on the foreigner and the foreign country.

[ 本帖最后由 kingsking 于 20-6-2008 13:03 编辑 ]

kingsking

good post to support

migao21

when i meet the first foreigner in 1999, (he is a university student, i think)
    when i met .... he was.... 用过去式比较好吧。
i feel they are clever and smart.
   用过去式， felt, 既然你提到是第一个， 那为何用they呢?
i think they know the world class knowledge and be a gentleman, i have much to study from them.
   be a gentleman这里接的是哪个主语？ study改成learn比较好， study更倾向于学术上的。
but when i have meet many foreigner such as the tourists and some foreign workers,   用过去分词和复数。
i feel they are odinary man too,
some is unpolite, is un clever and un smart. 用复数， 后面几个un词不清楚有没有这样说法。

I think i will have a justice judegement on the foreigner and the foreign country.
西方价值观念里面最忌讳的就是这个judge。  judge是论断的意思，就是给别人打标签，定义别人是某种类型（负面的，贬义）的人。 西方人认为只有God才可以judge people.  judge要不就是法律里面才可以用的词汇。

kingsking

原帖由 migao21 于 20-6-2008 10:19 发表

                               
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when i meet the first foreigner in 1999, (he is a university student, i think)
    when i met .... he was.... 用过去式比较好吧。
i feel they are clever and smart.
   用过去式， felt, 既然你提到是第 ...

thank you.
my English is poor.

kingsking

原帖由 migao21 于 20-6-2008 10:19 发表

                               
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when i meet the first foreigner in 1999, (he is a university student, i think)
    when i met .... he was.... 用过去式比较好吧。
i feel they are clever and smart.
   用过去式， felt, 既然你提到是第 ...

I have amended my first floor's post

migao21

Know more about foreigner, feel more plain about foreigner
  plain 是单音节的形容词， 比较级用plainer吧。感觉用the more , the more句型比较好吧。(The more I know...., the plainer i feel about them)

when i met the first foreigner in 1999 in China, (he is a university student, i think)
  这里后面的括号没有必要， he was 过去式你还是没有改， 还有i thought
i feel the foreigner is always clever and polite. i think they know the world-class knowledge and are very gentle, and then I have much things to learn from them.
  你要说你感觉什么什么事情， 最好还是用I'd  thought, 就是“原先以为”的意思， 可以同下文的你的感觉改变对应。 你既然后面用了复数， 这里最好用foreigners.  而后面你继续用i think(had thought)有点词汇的重复， 可以改变believe,

And when i grow more old, and have met many foreigners such as the tourists and some foreign workers,
   old 的比较级不是more old.   后面的and have缺少主语。
i feel they are odinary man too.
  这里ordinary拼写错误. 现在写文章很注重性别的区别的减少， 这里最好用persons,.
  当然你认为你碰到过的老外都是男的， 那也别用man，至少是men
Some of them are not polite, not clever and not gentle.

I think i should have a fairer evaluation on the foreigner and the foreign country.
     你这里用了evaluation， 感觉不大妥当， evaluation有推算价值的意思。 我觉得这里简单点可以用view, 或者用attitude，opinion， perspective。 具体我也不大清楚。

migao21

原帖由 kingsking 于 20-6-2008 14:58 发表

                               
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thank you.
my English is poor.

千万别再说poor了。 如果要说自己英语不好， 就说My English is not very good. 或者My English sucks.

kingsking

原帖由 migao21 于 20-6-2008 13:52 发表

                               
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Know more about foreigner, feel more plain about foreigner
  plain 是单音节的形容词， 比较级用plainer吧。感觉用the more , the more句型比较好吧。(The more I know...., the plainer i feel about them)

...

thank you.
i will correct it after today's work.

xblues

Thanks for sharing.
I think I know a lot about foreigners...and still foreigners to me are mystery... interesting animals.

kingsking

原帖由 xblues 于 20-6-2008 15:17 发表

                               
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Thanks for sharing.
I think I know a lot about foreigners...and still foreigners to me are mystery... interesting animals.

Animals?
crazy..

xblues

Yes, all human beings are animals!

kingsking

when i met the first foreigner in 1999 in China, who was an university student, i remember.
I'd  thought that the foreigners are always clever and polite. I believed they know the world-class knowledge and are very gentle, and then I have much things to learn from them.

And when i grow elder, I have met many foreigners such as tourists and some foreign workers,
now, I feel they are ordinary persons too.
Some of them are not polite, not clever and not gentle.

So I think i have had a fairer view on the foreigner and the foreign country.

采薇子

先说这句：
when i met the first foreigner in 1999 in China, who was an university student ..........

大家都没注意到“the first foreigner ”这个表达的问题么？楼主的意思是说自己在生活中第一次遇到外国人，而不是遇到“第一个外国人”（who能告诉我第一个外国人是谁？呵呵）；还有，university 的首字母并不是元音发音，所以用冠词“a”就可以了；读完第一段发现，这第一句话居然只是一个从句，貌似是后面几句话的时间状语，这样语法上很有问题！所以建议改下第一句话的表达  
It would be better as the following:     It was in 1999 in China that I  met the first  foreigner in my life, who was a university student..........

elder一般表示“年长的，资格老的或者辈份大的”，older有elder的用法和更多的用法，不过在做表语的时候只能用older，所以根据这里的意思来看，用older就可以了，虽然口语里面也许可以混用，但是相对来说还是这样表达更好

最后一句话最好把最后的两个名词改成复数：
So I think I have had a fairer view on the foreigners and foreign countries.


作为口语表达的话，还有些小地方就不必苛求了
希望这些建议对楼主有帮助哈！

[ 本帖最后由 vivi0905 于 20-6-2008 20:59 编辑 ]

kingsking

原帖由 vivi0905 于 20-6-2008 18:43 发表

                               
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先说这句：
when i met the first foreigner in 1999 in China, who was an university student ..........

大家都没注意到“the first foreigner ”这个表达的问题么？楼主的意思是说自己在生活中第一次遇到外 ...

thanks,记下了。：）
就不再修改了，留给后来人看吧。：）

I feel i get some progress after these amendments which make me think more grammar and vocabulary in English expression.

woody81

采薇子

原帖由 kingsking 于 21-6-2008 10:01 发表

                               
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I feel i get some progress after these amendments which make me think more about grammar and vocabulary in English expression.

请看我加红色的那个单词。。。
  不好意思哈，我是纠察大队的，专门纠错

flyday

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THAT IS LUCKY MM'S JOB

kingsking

原帖由 vivi0905 于 21-6-2008 20:34 发表

                               
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请看我加红色的那个单词。。。
  不好意思哈，我是纠察大队的，专门纠错

you are welcome.

采薇子